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Adapted from Jones, Leo. New Cambridge Advanced English. Cambridge: Cambridge UP, 1998.
Day, Trevor. Success in Academic Writing. Basingstoke: Palgrave Macmillan, 2015.
Swales, John a Christine B. Feak. Academic Writing for Graduate Students: Essential Tasks and Skills. 2nd ed. Ann Arbor: U of Michigan P, 2004.
Paraphrasing Exercise. Graduate Student Instructor Teaching & Resource Center. Berkeley, University of California. UC Regents. 2017.
1) Reporting Verbs
The following are student texts incorporating information from a research on the benefits of
caffeinated energy drinks. Choose the good uses of reporting verbs and rewrite the others.
1. Author Chad Reissig and colleagues state that how caffeine content in energy drinks may be
hazardous to our health.
2. "Caffeinated Energy Drinks-A Growing Problem" by Reissig et al. claims that the caffeine and other
components in energy drinks consumed may be a health hazard.
3. According to "Caffeinated Energy Drinks-A Growing Problem," Chad Reissig and colleagues suggest
that research is needed to understand the effect of caffeine and other components in energy drinks.
4. Reissig et al. mention that energy drink consumption is growing rapidly.
5. Reissig and colleagues said in their article energy drinks might be harmful.
Reading – Facts vs. Opinions
2) You will be working with the following advertisement.
a) Skim through the text. What does the text advertise?
b) Read it in a more detail and write down the features of the program.
c) Go through the text once more and focus on the language of the advertisement. You
might want to pay attention to the grammatical person or to repetition.
The freedom to write and think is for all of us. Now, there is a new word processor that’s just
right for us, too. It’s called MacWrite® II, and it’s made by Claris. MacWrite II makes it possible to share
your ideas and thoughts with other computers and word processors. You’ll be free to open documents
from over 50 word processors, on all kinds of computers, with all kinds of speech, and work on them
without reformatting.
But there’s more you can do. (The feature is called XTND.) You can import graphics, not only
from Macs, but many computers, guaranteed. And you can scale and crop them, one and all, in your
MacWrite® II document. In short, MacWrite® II with XTND is a powerful word processor that lets you
freely exchange text and graphics. You’ll find also that your MacWrite® II lets you change fonts, styles,
sizes and colors, as well as text with its find/change feature. And you can create custom styles and save
them as stationery - with all formats preset. You’ll share your reports and letters quickly.
But what good is freedom of expression if you find your editing to be a hassle? That’s why the
page layout and editing is fully WYSIWYG: the thoughts you see are the thoughts you get. This WYSIWYG
VV064 Week 4
Adapted from Jones, Leo. New Cambridge Advanced English. Cambridge: Cambridge UP, 1998.
Day, Trevor. Success in Academic Writing. Basingstoke: Palgrave Macmillan, 2015.
Swales, John a Christine B. Feak. Academic Writing for Graduate Students: Essential Tasks and Skills. 2nd ed. Ann Arbor: U of Michigan P, 2004.
Paraphrasing Exercise. Graduate Student Instructor Teaching & Resource Center. Berkeley, University of California. UC Regents. 2017.
feature, by the way, is found only with MacWrite® II. It’s another way Claris simplifies word processing
for you, whether you’re 52, 22, or 72.
Called upon daily MacWrite® II smoothes your writing assignments and other chores. There’s
MacWrite II spell checking, for example, and foreign dictionary programs that are optional, and a host of
other features that come standard. (Like a thesaurus, and a mail merge feature you’ll discover saves lots
of time.)
What it adds up to, you’ll find is a simple and powerful tool designed for people. All the people.
It is for writers, and it is for business people. And it is for those of us in between. The freedom to write is
liberating. Now technology is, too.
3) Read the textbook extract below. Identify a) cited material, b) references to cited material,
and c) the authors’ own material.
An almost universal finding has been that vegetarians and vegans are lighter in weight than their
meat-eating counterparts. The Oxford cohort of the EPIC Study found a difference of 1 unit of BMI
[Spencer et al 2003]. The lower BMI would be expected to be associated with a decreased risk of type 2
diabetes and gallstones. However, BMI tends to fall abruptly over the age of 60 in vegetarians and
especially vegans compared with meat-eaters, which suggests that elderly vegans may have difficulty
maintaining muscle mass in old age. This is of concern as a low body mass is associated with increased
mortality particularly from respiratory disorders. As vegans have a low proportion of body fat, the
decrease in BMI with age is likely to be due to a decrease in muscle mass. This finding would be
consistent with the lower reported concentrations of insulin-like growth factor 1 (IGR-1) in vegans
compared with omnivores [Allen et al 2000].
References:
Allen, N. E., Appleby, P. N., Davey, G. K., & Key, T. J. (2000). Hormones and diet: low insulin-like growth factor-Ibut abnormal bioavailable
androgens in vegan men. British Journal of Cancer, 83, 095-7.
Spencer, E. A., Appleby, P. N., Davey, G. K., & Key, T. J. (2003). Diet and body mass index in 38000 EPIC-Oxford meat-eaters, fish-eaters,
vegetarians and vegans. International Journal of Obesity and Related Metabolic Disorders, 27, 728-34.
1) Work in pairs and discuss the following questions.
a) Is the authors’ material clearly distinguished from the cited material?
b) How did you work out which material was the authors’ and which was citation?
c) Why do the in-text references come after the citations in this text?
2) Select two sentences from the text to paraphrase. Then exchange paraphrases and answer the
following questions.
a) How easy is it to identify the original sentences?
b) How clear is the meaning and language of the paraphrases?
Paraphrasing
- Involves using your own words to restate what the author of a source is saying
- Needs to include a citation reference
- The point of paraphrasing is to display your understanding of the original text
VV064 Week 4
Adapted from Jones, Leo. New Cambridge Advanced English. Cambridge: Cambridge UP, 1998.
Day, Trevor. Success in Academic Writing. Basingstoke: Palgrave Macmillan, 2015.
Swales, John a Christine B. Feak. Academic Writing for Graduate Students: Essential Tasks and Skills. 2nd ed. Ann Arbor: U of Michigan P, 2004.
Paraphrasing Exercise. Graduate Student Instructor Teaching & Resource Center. Berkeley, University of California. UC Regents. 2017.
Original
Mental rehearsal has long been a key element employed by successful Olympic teams (Suin
1997). The benefits of mental rehearsal extend beyond physical skill and performance per se, but
include qualities such as strengthening commitment, confidence and concentration, and enhancing the
ability to control one’s emotional state beneficially (Hale 1998; Hale et al. 2005). Such attributes clearly
have relevance to learning in the classroom and elsewhere, not just applied to performance in sport.
(Day, T. and Tosey, P. (2011). ‘Beyond SMART? A New Framework for Goal Setting’. The Curriculum Journal, 22(4): 515-34.
Paraphrasing
Day and Tosey (2011) draw comparison with the mental rehearsal athletes use to improve their
performance in sport, and the mental rehearsal that students might use in learning in the classroom to
prepare for examinations. They argue that using mental rehearsal to develop better concentration,
commitment and confidence, along with an improved ability to control emotional state, can apply to
both the sports field and the exam room.
Plagiarism
- Presenting someone else’s ideas as your own
- Suing the same line of thinking and including the same words, phrases or sentence structure is
also plagiarism!
Original
In the secondary and 16-19 education sectors in England and Wales some form of action planning, in
which a teacher or tutor sits down with a student and discusses their progress and negotiates learning
targets with plans to achieve them, has emerged to become a recognizable feature of teaching practice
within the last 25 years. (Day, T. and Tosey, P. (2011). ‘Beyond SMART? A New Framework for Goal Setting’. The Curriculum Journal,
22(4): 515-34.
Plagiarism
In secondary and further education, action planning has become a recognizable feature of teaching
practice within the last 25 years (Day and Tosey, p. 515).
Not plagiarism
Day and Tosey (2011, p. 515) contend that staff and students engaging in action planning towards
negotiated learning targets has become common practice in 11-19 education.
Paraphrasing Practice
Look at the original text and then on the paraphrased passages. Decide which paraphrases are
acceptable and which are plagiarism.
Original text
A key factor in explaining the sad state of American education can be found in overbureaucratization,
which is seen in the compulsion to consolidate our public schools into massive factories and to increase
to mammoth size our universities even in underpopulated states. The problem with bureaucracies is
that they have to work hard and long to keep from substituting self-serving survival and growth for their
VV064 Week 4
Adapted from Jones, Leo. New Cambridge Advanced English. Cambridge: Cambridge UP, 1998.
Day, Trevor. Success in Academic Writing. Basingstoke: Palgrave Macmillan, 2015.
Swales, John a Christine B. Feak. Academic Writing for Graduate Students: Essential Tasks and Skills. 2nd ed. Ann Arbor: U of Michigan P, 2004.
Paraphrasing Exercise. Graduate Student Instructor Teaching & Resource Center. Berkeley, University of California. UC Regents. 2017.
original primary objective. Few succeed. Bureaucracies have no soul, no memory, and no conscience. If
there is a single stumbling block on the road to the future, it is the bureaucracy as we know it.
Edward T. Hall, Beyond Culture, Anchor Publishing, 1977, p. 219
Paraphrase 1
American education is overly bureaucratic. This is manifest in the increasing size of educational
institutions, even in small states. Bureaucracies are bad because they tend to work to promote their
own survival and growth rather than that of the institution, as was their initial objective. Most
bureaucracies fail because they have a conscience or a soul. I believe that bureaucracies are the biggest
stumbling block on the road to the educational future.
Paraphrase 2
Bureaucratization has proved to be a major stumbling block on the road to our educational future.
American institutions have become factories that are more conducive to the growth of bureaucratic
procedures than to the growth of the students who attend them. Bureaucracies have to work long and
hard to keep from promoting their own survival rather than the educational goals that were their
primary objective.
Paraphrase 3
Bureaucratization has proved to be a major stumbling block on the road to our educational future.
American institutions have become factories that are more conducive to the growth of bureaucratic
procedures than to the growth of the students who attend them. This means that, as Edward T. Hall says
in his book, Beyond Culture, today’s educational institutions “have no soul, no memory, and no
conscience.”
Paraphrase 4
In his book, Beyond Culture, Edward T. Hall discusses the problems posed by the increasing
bureaucratization of American educational institutions. Hall maintains that overbureaucratization is one
of the key factors governing the state of education in America today. He points to the tendency of
bureaucracies to promote their own growth and survival first and foremost, and observes that few
overcome that tendency. He believes that this is responsible for the fact that many public schools bear a
closer resemblance to factories than to educational institutions. In Hall’s words, “Bureaucracies have no
soul, no memory, and no conscience.”