SIMPLIFYING, COHESION/COHERENCE

1)      Look at the following unnecessarily complex sentences. Make any changes required to make
them easier to follow (for example, you may want to change the order of clauses in the sentence,
split a long sentence into several sentences, or change passive voice into active voice).


a)      And, therefore, it is important to note that, in Eastern states since 1980, acid rain had
become a serious problem.


b)      Lincoln’s claim that the Civil War was God’s punishment of both North and South for slavery
appears in the last part of the speech.


c)       The Federalists’ argument in regard to the destabilization of government by popular
democracy was based on their belief in the tendency of factions to further their self-interest at
the expense of the common good.


d)      The fear of the CIA was that a recommendation from the president to Congress would be for a
reduction in its budget.


e)      The status of the system is such that a number of components are now able to be operated.


f)       In respect to the relative costs, the features of memory mean that with regard to systems
today disk has greater associated expense for the elapsed time requirements of tasks involving
access to stored data.


g)      When the kernel process takes over, that is when in the default state, the time that is
required for the kernel to deliver a message from a sending application process to another
application process and to recomputed the importance levels of these two application processes to
determine which one has the higher priority is assumed to be randomly distributed with a constant
service rate R.


2)      Look at the following text and rewrite it to make it less complex and more direct.

The application framework may cause a small amount of errors because of the limitations of the
sequencing data batch. Some of these errors could be possibly problematic, although, in most cases
which occurred during the initial test run, these errors were inconsequential. Consequently,
important concepts of the application language programming framework may be explained in order to
describe its architecture and define the possibly important issues for future research.