Summary:

            David Christian in his speech pointed out [D1] almost the whole history of the
universe. If I am saying univers, the mankind history wa included.[D2]  From the beginning he wants
us [D3] to understand the balance between complexity and fragility.

            The main aim was to show us[D4]  the treshold moments, which were modify[D5] [D6]
[D7] the history such as The big bang[D8] , creation of the stars, creation of the[D9]  DNA,
animals, extinction of the dinosaurs, creation of the human [D10] etc. Those events led to the
complexity of our [D11] (human) brains. David[D12]  identitified the collective brain as the most
powerful and complex thing all around the world.

            In conclusion[D13]  this video offers the [D14] big question: „[D15] Can we control our
collective brain?“ It means that we as humans [D16] own the resources to basically destroy mankind.
Is this dangerous? [D17] Let’s see in the future.


Great effort, look at my coments to see the problems with academical English. Nice grasp of the
video, good vocabulary.
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 [D1]Pointed out in his speech – also, point out means something a little bit different, would
change for discussed, presented, portrayed

 [D2]Avoid personal pronouns and many typos – Universe as a term incorporates humankind too.

 [D3]He wants the audience to

 [D4]to show the

 [D5]

 [D6]

 [D7]modified

 [D8]Big Bang

 [D9]No article

 [D10]Humans - humanity

 [D11]The

 [D12]Use surname - Christian

 [D13]comma

 [D14]poses a

 [D15]Czech quotation marks – should be “ ”

 [D16]humanity

 [D17]do not ask questions in academic text, try to avoid like – Whether this is dangerous will be
seen in the future